Wednesday, May 21, 2014

Krista Ramsey- For better vision, kids need time outdoors

The article I chose to read was called, For better vision, kids need time outdoors by Krista Ramsey. I chose this article because it interested me in a way that I can relate to. This column is about how kids are losing their vision while excessively playing on their IPhone or tablet.

The reason i like this article is that is has an amazing introduction that almost any teenager can relate to. " You see it all the time. Your teenager at the dinner table, waiting for his checkup at the orthodontist’s office, sauntering to his car – continually hunched over his smartphone or IPad" This is the introduction to her column. I noticed that she used allusions to go into detail about what she was talking about when she said, "smartphone". I also believe that this is a great introduction because it feels like Ramsey is talking to you, the reader, specifically. The way she introduced her topic is more of a personal letter than an article. I think this helps her grab the readers attention by making them feel comfortable and more engaged in the column.

The syntax throughout the article was mostly short, to the point paragraphs that got the information across as soon as possible to keep the readers attention. I also noticed that Ramsey used a lot of quotes from other reliable sources instead of getting all of her information from one source. "Dr. Joseph Clark, a professor of neurology and rehabilitative medicine with UC Health, worries that it’s shrinking it". This is an example of Ramsey using a reliable source that knows all about the topic and is a professional. The source backed up Ramsey's point and made the reader trust her more and will most likely use her as a source in the future.

Questions for Ramsey-
1. What made you wright about this topic when it has been around for so long?

2. Is there any evidence against your point?

3. What source did you get the solution from?

Link to the article- Krista Ramsey- For better vision, kids need time outdoors

1 comment:

  1. I like how you added questions for the author and a llink

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